Thread: Your Own Poetry
View Single Post
Old March 16th, 2004, 04:21 PM   #43
brede
my new motorcycle
 
brede's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2004
Location: Florida
Posts: 574
How about a simple one word change? Instead of "out of your attractive field" see what you think about "from your magnetic field"? It sounds to me like it maintains the same rhythm. However, advise is worth what it costs, and this time it's free! So, at least you got your money's worth from me! LOL!
__________________
I wanted to be a pirate, but I couldn't grow a beard and rum makes me giggle.
brede is offline   Reply With Quote