Thread: Your Own Poetry
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Old March 17th, 2004, 08:02 AM   #46
kathe nichols
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I think, late last night while I was not sleeping, I figured out what's bothering me about the poem. It's the first section. It isn't powerful enough - doesn't convey the effort, strain and sheer <i>desperation</i> required to break free of gravity.

Meanwhile, here's my answer to Lou's challenge last year, to write a poem about my state (Arizona, but really only my particular high-altitude plateau...)

<u>Look Fiercely</u>

This land never wears green,
on Saint Patrick's or any other day.
She refuses to dress up,
to invite the eye.
To know her, she demands
you learn to look.

Look high, look wide:
at folded mountains and mobile skies;
at light and colors that change all day;
at a hunting hawk spiralling into the sun.

Look low, look small:
at pinhead flowers hiding behind thorny stems;
at the uniqueness of each pebble;
at aninmal tracks unsmudged by rain.

Look fiercely, and you will earn
a love as fierce in return.
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